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Author Topic: Spoiling the Clandestine Arangement  (Read 794 times)
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« on: January 04, 2010, 01:46:45 AM »

Worse for the wear
Of spoiling the clandestine arrangement
This aint workin for me
Reaching for the unholy gold
Advices from my friends I've been told
To trifle with the common affairs
Sure it made me smile And be laden with guilt for a good while
Which compromise my placing
I've been told that I'm just fine the way I am

A slight return to the ordinary
The premise still makes me angry
From time to time it serves me right, serves me well
Cuz the drama right now is all too cliche
And the games doesn't really entertain me much as other people do
A pastime to many, its all pointless to me
I'm well to the point its almost overrated
But it gets so cold in here
It gets so quiet when no ones around

A stranger in my bed
I slept with my thoughts wandered west
I thought it'd be nice to fold my arms and rest my head
With the idea that burns inside my chest
What a tease to begin with
For the first time I never felt so deprived
So I thought "hey, you should go and figure out yourself
But I probably won't be here when you're done"
It made things easier now that I thought about it
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« Reply #1 on: February 05, 2010, 07:37:59 PM »

I love this. It makes you think outside of yourself. And the drama IS all too cliche. It felt so much like looking in on myself when I read this. What does a this line mean though? I kind of saw "A stranger in my bed" is  referring to how you don't know who you are, therefore you're going to find yourself, or it is a stranger, and it depicits how you're already kind of lonely, and you're giving up on yourself? Or is it something else? I thought it would be kind of interesting.
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« Reply #2 on: February 07, 2010, 03:23:16 AM »

I love this. It makes you think outside of yourself. And the drama IS all too cliche. It felt so much like looking in on myself when I read this. What does a this line mean though? I kind of saw "A stranger in my bed" is  referring to how you don't know who you are, therefore you're going to find yourself, or it is a stranger, and it depicits how you're already kind of lonely, and you're giving up on yourself? Or is it something else? I thought it would be kind of interesting.

That line that you quote pretty much means a person, in a certain way a stranger whom you still trying to get to know. The poem doesn't necessarily depicts my "loneliness" but such feelings do return and hit you hard. It's a lonely thing when you're looking for someone to love but can't seem to find it anywhere but you don't wanna look because it won't be the way you want it to be: coincidence. 

The first paragraph is what my friends been telling me to...go out and do something out of the ordinary. The 2nd is pretty much what i think about what they say and what i think i'd get out of it. The 3rd is when is the outcome, hahaha, if you read between the lines.
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« Reply #3 on: June 09, 2010, 07:46:32 AM »

good work Wink
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« Reply #4 on: July 29, 2010, 03:23:01 AM »

Have to say I love your work Milo... cant quite figure you out or sometimes, where it is leading which makes the premise more alluring in your poetry. When I read this I felt you were trying to convey where you were at in your walk with God and how you handled situations around you. You must have many friends with some timely advice. Being retrospective is what makes a poet so appealing.
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« Reply #5 on: July 29, 2010, 07:02:38 PM »

haha. I know, I intend to not be read through right away and i lead them away to the point where they can find themselves back into it.
Thanks for the interesting comment.
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